Am i talented or should i give up writing?

wow... i love the storyline, it makes me want to read more :) and no i don't think you should give up writing at all, you are talented definitely and you are really good even though you are only 16. The only way to improve is the write every day, don't look at other stuff you have written the day before because that will slow you down, just write about things you love then in a months look back at where you started and i bet you'll see lots of improvement. I think its just punctuation (im rubbish at that too) and i liked how you described things. But i think it was very dark, like how it seemed Tom view of the world was negative, which sometimes happens to e if im in a bad mood. But i liked how at the end the creature came, and the mood was much lighter when Tom smiled at him and it finished the scene really nicely :) hope i helped x